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Leïlani
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How'd you like my writing sparkles?

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My dad's from France, so I speak some French, but I'm not very good at it -I was raised in Dutch (Flemish) so that's my native language. Because of that, my stories might seem odd to people who are English/Australian/American/Canadian/... but I try my best to keep it clean and smooth :) I'm always open to feedback: I might make use of a lot of profanity, but I can assure you, I don't bite.

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:bulletgreen: Sherlock
:bulletgreen: Supernatural
:bulletgreen: Marvel
:bulletgreen: Lord of The Rings/The Hobbit
:bulletgreen: Star Trek
:bulletgreen: Being Human (US/UK)
:bulletgreen: Dexter
:bulletgreen: The IT-Crowd (UK) thanks to DoggyMakeAwish
:bulletgreen: Once Upon a Time
:bulletgreen: Hannibal
:bulletgreen: :new: Doctor Who :new:

HARRHARRHARR COMIC SANS
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  • Mood: Distracted
  • Listening to: Poisoning The Well - Matthew Perry
So yeah. I've been trying to write, but I don't have a lot of spare time. Finals and such. 
I'm hopelessly behind of requests and challenges, but I trying really hard to stay productive. 

Lately, I've been trying to create some slam poetry. It's a lot harder than I thought! I've done poetry in the past, but this is just so much more than just the haiku's I made in high school. I'm going to include a little something I've been working on in this journal, and I would like to ask for some feedback. It is by no means finished, but I'd just like to know if I'm on to something. I have no clue what I'm doing, so I'm open to suggestions. ANYTHING will help. 

Please keep in mind that this is very personal, and honestly, I'm hoping a lot of you decide not to read it. I'm taking a chance here and hoping for the best. 

My Dearly Beloved

I have loved you since the day we first met
No, even before then, I knew you were out there
One day, your name popped up in my friends list unexpectedly
It was nothing special
Just a name
Like any other

I grew fond of that name, your name
Each day, I would look at it and feel my heart dance
Even now, I'm not sure I understand why,
but you had me, every part of me
Every part of me leaped to blinding heights at the sound of your name
Danced, seeing you smile,
and cried, when you joined hands with another

She made you happy, so I wailed in silence
I became her friend, and our ways shifted
Where I believed we were once headed towards love,
now stood a strong friendship
One that would last forever
I moved on
Let go
Watched, a forced smile on my lips, as you kissed her</small>

Then, the day finally came
I pat your back, nodding
I felt sorry when you said your relationship wasn't working out
but laughed and rejoiced behind your back
for it would mean you could once again be mine!

There was one thing,
however
I had not accounted for:
I was your friend now, as was your girlfriend
<...>

I realize this is incomplete and missing the actual 'kick' that a spoken/performed poem has, but please bear with me. I would really appreciate some advice. 

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Emmisue Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Happy Birthday!! Love 
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JaneWeller Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:spainballoons:birthday cakeHappy Birthday!birthday cake   :spainballoons: 
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drummerkidd12 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Photographer
Thanks for the fave!!!
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ThePirateHobbit Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cheers 4 the :+fav: :)
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giusynuno Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Thank you so much for faving!!!!!!! It means a lot to me:heart:
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ice-cream-skies Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the faves!
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Flash-Shiranui Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Are you still taking challenges?
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Snii8D Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
Thanks for the fave!! :iconletmehugyouplz:
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baileyboozzx Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
I think someone may have reposted your Rooftop Romance one-shot. The Clint Barton one? I found it on Quotev.com. The description says some were written by her and others were some she'd found. But the actual one-shot didn't have a link crediting you. I dunno if it's really a big deal, since she didn't claim it as her own but I still thought you might wanna know. If you want to look at it, here's the link: www.quotev.com/story/3236503/A…
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Lani666 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for telling me! I'm sorry for the delayed reply, I haven't been active in a while. I'll ask for some credit, and then we'll see. :3 
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